That's beautiful and I love the way you broke up the phrase of writing on the wall.
Thank you, Lisa. I'm glad you liked it. I was struggling to fit it in any other way! Sometimes the best ideas happen by accident!
I love your poem - it really spoke to me. I like the way you have used a verse per phrase.
This made me feel very sad. I find poetry very emotional - especially when it is such good poetry!
This is written so beautifully. It flows well and is evocative of times gone by.
Hi Ali, thanks for the comment. I didn't notice I'd done that about the phrases per verse at all but it did seem to fit.Lynda, thank you for the comment too - and the compliment :) I'm glad you liked it.Anna, thanks for commenting. I was trying to make it flow in a sad way, I'm happy it did the job!
Great stuff, Jim!I particularly like "The trees in our orchard cried leaves for her".
Another versifier! I was just struck by the single word "fruitless" since it could relate to a barren orchard. Deliberate choice or Freudian? Either way, an interesting and powerful take on the theme, Jim!Oh, and stop stealing my avatar ideas ;-) Gotta love South Park!
Thanks Dughall! Glad you liked it!
Hi Colin, Deliberate choice! And as for the Avatar, we must have both supplied at that school! :p
This is beautful Jim. I always really admire people who can write poetry - especially when it's as well written as this one.
Great piece. Glad someone else chose verse too. :)
"The trees in our orchard cried leaves for her;" Unforgettable.
How sad and yet beautiful to be remembered with such love.
Thank you all for your comments, they're really lovely!
Sad. Love the symbolism of Autum that you have used. I don't know why, but this reminds me of "On Ragland Road"
Sad and so wonderfully written. Love the way you have split up one of the prompts. Sounds very Autumn. x
Poignant. Clever. Thought provoking, not the least for the unique ide of breaking up a phrase :)
Hi Bill, thanks for the comment. I just read Raglan Rd for the first time now, it's fantastic! Glad I was able to evoke similar feelings.Hi Susan, thank you, too. I'm glad you liked it.Hi Taochild, Again, thank you for the comment. I broke the phrase up by accident. Sometimes the best things are accidental!
I too love the crying leaves Jim. This is very poignant. It is definitely an autumn piece with the sadness of the coming of winter. Super Jim!
Beautiful poem. I love the orchard trees weeping leaves. It is very sad, but then, life often is. Well done!
Love the construction, flows so well . . G Sussex